I has a few flaws, but it's nicely colored.
I'd get rid of that double-focal below the text, it's a little distracting and doesn't need to be there. It also goes from very bright to very dark, a hard technique to play with, but you seem to have done pretty good.

You could possibly make it a bit more, how to say it ... interactive with the audience. It seems pretty hollowed in there, and you could bring it out more. I see some depth happening, but the flow is a little off. Nice work all in all.