Have the same feeling you did about it, nd im really not sure.
I don't like it, but I don't dislike it. I can see the potential, sort of, but its a little bit fuzzy round the edges in places. For instance I like the effects around the anime doll however I don't like that you used it directly onto the layer. It's cut the left ear off which is a little annoying to me. And as much as I like the effects I'm kinda in limbo about whether it goes with the rest of the tag.
Double Focal is never really a good idea either.
If i'm brutally honest my first thought was that I'd scrap it and start again. Seems to be something I've done a bit of recently. Is it all one stock or mulitple?