great short story enjoyed your detailed description as you told the story and how you worked up the suspense to the final conclusion of what was really happening there was one sentence that i can point out that i think could be worded better:

"He grew nearer the figures. His steps stuttering in haste. Should he really be confronting the mystery ahead of him?"

nice job would like to see more from you i hope you got good marks on this k.i.u.