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View Poll Results: Vote for best poetry

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  • Slave

    4 22.22%
  • Domino

    14 77.78%
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  1. #11
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    pffww.. this is difficult!

    Domino: very nice flow and good choice of high-words (is that what you call that?), but maybe a bit to pompous..

    Slave: Chaotic (I find that charming) flow and use off common words (wich makes it more easy to follow)

    I apreciate both styles! damn this is hard!
    Being mentioned in Slave's poem makes me to biased.. she gmv.

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    DMN rmv, short, snappy and easy to take in, on top of that filled with love.



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    Quote Originally Posted by Xelo View Post
    pffww.. this is difficult!

    Domino: very nice flow and good choice of high-words (is that what you call that?), but maybe a bit to pompous..

    Slave: Chaotic (I find that charming) flow and use off common words (wich makes it more easy to follow)

    I apreciate both styles! damn this is hard!
    Being mentioned in Slave's poem makes me to biased.. she gmv.

    pretty much, ya well thx. thx rad meant to be that way.

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    dom get my vote, the meter and rythm of the poem are better, as well as the lexical choice.




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    Congrats Domino it was a very well made and lovely poem to read

    p.s ^^

    Radi's one of a kind gift <3

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    thx slave for that and for the battle we will rematch soon. Glad you liked it at least, I knew it would make you cry when I was writing it

    I originally started writing a eulogy for you as if you had died by my words. here is what I had started off with,
    Slave's death eulogy lol

    Through the hazy cloud of faded anonymity
    She unmasked her heart with humbled tranquility
    The quiet Beauty with no excuse
    The one we all could call our muse
    When all the words were said and done
    Our beloved friend had come and gone

    If trouble striked she saved the day
    with no fear of death she paved the way
    The wreched pain without her presence
    darkens my soul my mind my essence
    I can't believe I feel this way
    The best has come and gone away

    The love we lost will still remain
    She lived she loved she felt our pain
    From dusk till dawn her spirit pervailed
    Her Endless creativity had never failed
    I wish you all could rant and rave
    About the one they all called Slave


    I tweaked it and played with it till I got what I liked, went for more of a upbeat poem about birth instead of death.
    Last edited by cC.DOMINO™; 04-13-2011 at 05:16 AM.

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    I cant believe im actually reading a poem, both are really good but i enjoyed reading Dom's more tbh.
    I know the competition is over but just felt like letting u guys know ur good lol
    enzo <3


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