A Flirt (2 of 2)

Part 2 of A Flirt. This time I went for a smooth, flowing approach.

Here lies a concept
Not too hard to grasp
Ready are you set?
Now you can relax

A thorn in several petals
And soothing as the sea
With form worth rich metals
And a face filled with glee

My sights are set on something
Whether below or above
My heart begins to sing
As I dance in love

The feeling spreads throughout
As your lips touch mine
Uttering I love you
And that you are fine

Looking straight at me
Observing all the motions
A naked soul you see
Yet you play with my emotions

I know what your thinking
Still I prostrate myself
I'll ignore my being sinking
Despite knowing how you felt

Ending seems abrupt to me but it was more so practice if anything. Give me your thoughts.

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Originally Posted by Long Winded Dishwasher

Part 2 of A Flirt. This time I went for a smooth, flowing approach.

Here lies a concept
Not too hard to grasp
Ready are you set?
Now you can relax

A thorn in several petals
And soothing as the sea
With form worth rich metals
And a face filled with glee

My sights are set on something
Whether below or above
My heart begins to sing
As I dance in love

The feeling spreads throughout
As your lips touch mine
Uttering I love you
And that you are fine

Looking straight at me
Observing all the motions
A naked soul you see
Yet you play with my emotions

I know what your thinking
Still I prostrate myself
I'll ignore my being sinking
Despite knowing how you felt

Ending seems abrupt to me but it was more so practice if anything. Give me your thoughts.

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the bolded lines ^^ are the only ones i don't think flow well. myself and felt dont really sound alike. the rest of it flows good and makes sense. kiu takken or LWD. good job on practicing I have been to, at work I just sit there and think of shit to write when I get home. lol

Same here mate. The result of a lack of words.

I'll keep trying. Can't wait to see what others will come up with:)