I got points for you
there not meant to make fun of you or to bring u down , they're for help

1.monotone = bleh
2. i cant see the text and its nasty
3. theres no flow its just like there yah know
4. Either the lighting is wack or you just didnt do any im not sure
5. left and right looks weird cus its just black and empty
6. and theres no depth AT ALL

good thing is though u have some good effects u just need to add more elements to the tag
like depth and what not
good work though